| 2011-09-09 11:03:02 |
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@ Last Comment.
Even though I apreciate your critascism and pointed out a flaw in my story, You don't have to be a sarcastic asshole about the matter. It's funny also, I remember there was point when I was 10 and two days later I was 11.. Strange how that can happen. I admitted at the start of this story I fucked up last time and apologised but I guess your too ignorant to read that.
@Comment before last.
Just one example? Do tell me more... but considering I am dyslexic and brand new to reading I think I have done pretty well on here as the stats speak for themselves. All three of my stories are above 90% possitive so i must not be as bad as you think. I would apreciate if you could give me the feedback of my other mistakes without also sounding like an arse.
Finally to both of you. I'd like to see you register on here and actually try and contritbute a story of your own and let others judge it and hunt each and every word searching for grammer errors.
Feedback is apre |
| 2011-09-09 11:03:22 |
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-ciated but don't be a dick about it please. |
| 2011-09-09 13:21:45 |
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@Anonymous reader
2011-09-09 12:42:05
I have no problem with your critiacism and I welcome it with open arms as I know the only way to improve is to be told my errors but please in future dont post comments along lines of
"You need a major overhaul... or at least a decent education"
or if you were the other person "Go back to school."
There is just no need for those comments, Pointing out the problem and giving me advise on how to improve would be fine. Eitherway it's done with now. I am going to re-read all the stories and spend hours fixing them up and repost them all into one post as an complete collection.
@Last Comment
I am actually dyslexic but I do not request sympthay but rather understanding, I have read stories on here for a few years and I aspire to write great stories that people will enjoy but you will have to remember that my mental limitations will get in the way but I do not want sympthay. I want to be told of my errors so I can fix them and write am |
| 2011-09-09 16:17:33 |
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@Anonymous reader
2011-09-09 13:31:24
I actually really do agree with you. The problem with this part of the story is that I aimed to finish it last night as I was planning to be really busy this weekend and I didn't want to leave the audiance hanging on part 2 for four days but plans changed. So in response to this I accept the ending is weak but I have ideas and I will be doing a major rehaul of my stories, bringing them all together and proof reading until my eyes bleed and desperatly attempt to remove every grammar error. I will reuplod the series in one post which will be a collection with part 4 included as a conclusion and elements of part 3 re-written involving more character interaction and speech explaing and talking about the acts dicipitated within the story. |
| 2011-09-09 16:19:26 |
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Finally to the 'pedo story' thing. In my eyes pedo stories focus around sexual acts of a child only and contain no passion or rommance within them but rather just focus on the sexual aspects instead of the emotional side. This is not my style and I perfer to include the emotion and make the story much more light hearted rather than dark and eery. For this reason I don't see my series as pedophilic even though the characters ARE underaged but rather a mature and passionate series, others may agree or disagree but im afraid this will be the only story containg characters under the age of 13. |