| 2012-02-26 10:32:22 |
After school drama party!
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Sorry, I meant a "good" start. |
| 2012-02-26 13:14:53 |
Dustin
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Hi. Your writing is technically excellent, and the story intriguing. Maybe the reason people haven't rated it is because there's no sex. I've given you a positive rating because it's refreshing to read something that has good grammar. I'd love to read more. I hope you write more. All the best. |
| 2012-02-27 03:27:00 |
The Overlooked Girl
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Excellent, erotic and reminded me of a girl I once knew. I hope you do more stories. Good stuff. |
| 2012-02-28 05:27:07 |
Della
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Wow. That was good. I don't often read gir/girl stories, but after reading this, I will. You made it very sexy and arousing. Write some more. All the best. Unlike the other person who read it and didn't rate it, I did, and it was positive. Next time, though, put it in fiction or true story, and add more subjects. You'll have a much larger audience, which you deserve. Maybe repost it. That's what I did with my first one. All the best. |
| 2012-02-28 06:18:19 |
Making Sis Feel Better
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A brilliant start. Very erotic. I agree with some of the others; don't get the elder brother involved. Keep going. |