| 2012-03-03 06:06:47 |
Naughty School Girl
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A good start. Well writen and leaving the reader wishing for more, which I hope you will give. I've given you a positive rating - what else could I give? Good stuff and all the best to you. |
| 2012-03-04 06:40:56 |
Home alone_(4)
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A good story let down by the spelling and grammar. Have a read of some of mine and take note of the use of capital letters and full stops etc. Please feel free to message me if you want advice. Don't feel bad by the comments left by those before me. Writing takes practise, that's all. All the best to you. |
| 2012-03-05 07:48:21 |
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Absolutely brilliant!!!!!! Good writing, good srory, good characters, good situations . . . I could go on! I couldn't believe the 85% rating, but that WILL go up. A positive rating is the ONLY rating one that I can give! Anyone doing otherwise cannot appreciate the craft in the wordsmith. Keep going! |
| 2012-03-05 14:08:34 |
My First Cock Sucking
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Forget about the idiots saying faggots and freaks of nature. There'a something wrong with them. You advertised it as gay - so they needn't have read it. On another note, make the paragraphs shorter and give a bit more detail. All the best. |
| 2012-03-06 01:34:43 |
THE LUCKY BABYSITTER: Part 3 Losing the Cherry
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Hi. Thanks for pointing that out. I'd received a message about My early years part one: Mary's Story, while I was writing this one. It must have been a subconcsious slip. Sorry for that. It won't happen again, I promise. |