| 2012-08-24 00:23:43 |
Promise You Won't Break Me
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A few grammatical errors mostly missing commas and stuff but not really any grammar errors, for you, anyways. Keep in mind most people stick to the popular English so some my not understand some innuendo. Excellent story can't wait to see what happens. |
| 2012-08-24 01:13:49 |
danny phantom ghost boy series 2 jayrich
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Wow, was I the only one dying of laughter at Desiree’s wish. Hahahaha it still surprises me the thing people can come up with in these stories good job can't wait to read the rest. |
| 2012-08-26 02:16:10 |
Vengeance 1
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Might I just say excellent work here. would you attribute this to Stockholm syndrome? But truly marvelous was that they enjoyed it and one seems to want more this is going very nicely. |
| 2012-08-26 02:36:08 |
Vengeance 2
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Nice very nice Ellie seems to fall a little deeper into BDSM and she likes it one thing though here you seem to leave Ellie out of most of the action in this one but love the fact that he brought another girl down. Also it's not so bad to be unnoticeable it makes it easier to blend in. |
| 2012-08-30 23:46:28 |
The Ten of Them. Chapter 1
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Very nice; very nice for a prologue very good, little teasing between him and his mother was very good. the boy seems very humble can't wait to read the rest. |