| 2010-09-13 21:28:12 |
Sharing My Room With Sis 10: Abby's Fear
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I want to mention also; you have gone exactly the right path with this series all the way. I think it is perfect. (well, a few spelling errors and dog breed changes) You were right not to lessen the love Abby and her brother feel for each other by including Izzy. The narrator doesn't care for Izzy the way he cares about Abby and it isn't in his character to do something that isn't the best thing for all of them. I think this is the perfect end to this story. There should be no further chapters. All the comments asking for inclusion of Izzy's father or the main character's mother or three-somes, are wrong. Trust your instincts. They are good. Let the story stand as it is. It is art. |
| 2010-11-25 01:42:06 |
Good Vibrations
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A similar thing happened when I was that age. My parents were foolish enough to let us have mixed gender slumber parties all the way up until I was twelve. I lost my virginity when I was eleven. I have to say though, It wasn't the best thing. I didn't have sex again until I was seventeen and it was incredibly frustrating! I almost wish I had not lost my virginity so early. |
| 2010-12-15 06:00:27 |
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Well written, great details though the scenario strained my credulity to the breaking point. Though I enjoyed the story, I kept being pulled out of it by the thought, "That seems pretty fast/unlikely/over-the-top" I had to suspend too much disbelief for the story to be as good as it could have been. 6/10 |
| 2010-12-15 06:01:18 |
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Well written, great details though the scenario strained my credulity to the breaking point. Though I enjoyed the story, I kept being pulled out of it by the thought, "That seems pretty fast/unlikely/over-the-top" I had to suspend too much disbelief for the story to be as good as it could have been. 6/10 |
| 2012-09-10 10:47:04 |
Saturdays With My Sister
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Well written and believable. Good job! |