| 2015-09-21 16:39:44 |
The Scotch Bonnet
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The story line is great and I feel you could have a fine future as a writer. One of the most common errors a new writer makes is to not relax and slowly read his just finished story or hire a Proof Reader. Please continue on with your story. Thank You !!!! |
| 2015-09-21 17:06:51 |
Football Coach
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Anonymous readers always leave stupid remarks that seem written by a ten year old. As for this story see my comments on your other story, they apply to both. Keep writing. Thank You !!! |
| 2015-09-21 21:15:43 |
MY HISTORY TEACHER_(3)
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What a beautiful, professionally written story. With such wonderfully done detail I have to belive this is a case of "been there, done that". In the future I will be watching for more of your stories. Thank you !! |
| 2015-09-23 18:50:00 |
Fitness Model Moms_(1)
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The first two thirds were great; the last one third sucked. Won't be reading any more of your writing. !!!!!! |
| 2015-10-10 16:49:24 |
Halloween Treat_(2)
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Great story and writing, needs another chapter or more. Thank you !!! |