| 2016-01-01 15:53:01 |
My Daughter's Phone (part 7)
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OH you guys are such perverts. You will definitely like whats in store *L* |
| 2016-01-28 16:06:21 |
Gone to the Dogs (Part 3)
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OK for one... This is written by Kevin, a book smart teen. He doesn't know that Tanya can squirt, or even what squirting is. Which is why he called it pee. And secondly...This is the first time Tanya's Mom has been included in the story so be patient. |
| 2016-01-28 16:51:05 |
Gone to the Dogs (Part 3)
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OK for one... This is written by Kevin, a book smart teen. He doesn't know that Tanya can squirt, or even what squirting is. Which is why he called it pee. And secondly...This is the first time Tanya's Mom has been included in the story so be patient. |
| 2016-02-04 04:10:14 |
My Daughter's Phone (pt 4)_(1)
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Can you tell me what is wrong with the formatting and grammar? |
| 2016-04-13 15:34:34 |
Dad and I part 1_(0)
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work on your spacing and your next story will be great. You have what I have been told is 'a wall of text' Makes it hard to follow and the reader losses interest. Have a look at some hi rated stories for proper spacing. Use quotation marks and a space between each statement. Your stories will flow better but it will take a bit of work. Good idea so far though |