| 2015-12-15 06:20:37 |
The Triad and the Kidnapped Virgins 1: Taking the Young Wife
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Dude, you are a machine! Looking forward to more of this series. |
| 2016-01-29 03:28:24 |
choice of a step mother. Insertion - part-3
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Really hot story. Your pacing is perfect; building the tension perfectly. I think it could use some editing for clarity, spelling and word usage but the bones of the story are solid. |
| 2016-01-27 03:54:15 |
My Summer Back Home
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Could benefit with editing but very hot! |
| 2016-01-31 09:28:41 |
Holiday Break
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Good stuff |
| 2016-03-24 04:19:02 |
My Dad's Ex
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You've got a good story here. People taking issue with your grammar is not necessarily destructive - the fact is if oou improved oour grammar it would improve the story. I don't know how many remember TV without cable but reading a story with bad grammar is like watching TV with bad reception: you can still enjoy it but there is some interference. This is a sexy story but it would certainly be improved with better grammar. I hope you see this post as complimentary and not a personal attack. Keep writing but see if you can find an editor. |