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| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2014-03-10 01:54:36 | Your Brain is my slave: Part 08 - A visit from Lana | @Anonymous reader 2014-03-09 08:40:30 i want part nine and dont want it because its almost the end. everything must end at some point i guess Lol, that is pretty much the title of the last chapter ^^ @Anonymous reader 2014-03-09 10:24:53 The story seems dull now, add more kinky sex and hardcore sex I think you will enjoy the next chapter a bit more then ^^ @Anonymous reader 2014-03-09 12:26:10 Great story. Wring it for all it's worth. One point though about the pill with Lana. The pill in past stories has taken 15 to 20 mins to digest in his targets before the UV became effective. You accelerated it with her. Actually this was already done in chapter 6, where Trent takes control of Jennifer's father after only a few minutes. It might take a few days until the last 2 chapters are uploaded though, as they are on my laptop, which I forgot at a friends house. I just pray he wont snoop around in it ^^ |
| 2014-03-01 23:08:10 | Your Brain is my slave: Part 02 - Family fun time | Anonymous reader 2014-03-01 20:56:45 A little plot hole: being out in the sun would have exposed the mom to UV rays... anyone who takes one of the pills and goes outside would have activated it. Otherwise good story, I look forward to the rest I actually have a part in a later chapter of the story where the main character wonders about this himself, and comes up with a theory about why this is happening. I belive it is in part 04. When that part gets released, you can read that bit, and let me know what you think. I am always open to constructive critisism ^^ In general I am pretty amazed that my stories as getting this well of a reception, as I have only been writing erotic novels for about 2-3 months, with a total of 4 stories right now, 2 of which have been published in here. I will keep working on my english (I am a non-english guy) and try to make every new story better than the last. Anyway looking forward to your response in part 4 about this topic. |
| 2014-03-04 02:29:17 | Your Brain is my slave: Part 01 - Power to control | Thanks for all the nice words so far guys. Yes I know there are plotholes (I would have been EXTREEMELY surprised if nobody found any), but even the biggest hollywood movies tends to have plotholes as well, so I am not going to let that ruin too much. I like your points to my flaws here and there, and I will try to use them to improve my next story. I have only been active in writing stories like these for a bit over 2 months, so I am pretty much still in the infant stage here, but I will try to make myself better with every new story. As I said, this entire story was not even intended for release, and I just wrote it for the fun of it, whenever I had nothing else constructive to do. Anyway, like it or not, part 04 is about to be uploaded ^^ |
| 2014-03-04 02:29:48 | Your Brain is my slave: Part 02 - Family fun time | Thanks for all the nice words so far guys. Yes I know there are plotholes (I would have been EXTREEMELY surprised if nobody found any), but even the biggest hollywood movies tends to have plotholes as well, so I am not going to let that ruin too much. I like your points to my flaws here and there, and I will try to use them to improve my next story. I have only been active in writing stories like these for a bit over 2 months, so I am pretty much still in the infant stage here, but I will try to make myself better with every new story. As I said, this entire story was not even intended for release, and I just wrote it for the fun of it, whenever I had nothing else constructive to do. Anyway, like it or not, part 04 is about to be uploaded ^^ |
| 2014-03-16 04:48:59 | Your Brain is my slave: Part 10 - Nothing lasts forever | I will just say something here guys: This is the final chapter I am going to make. If you dont like this ending (and I have little doubt that many will hate this ending), then you can just forget that you ever read it, and make up your own ending to this. Writing this story has been fun, but I will stop here before I run out of inspiration. besides, working on one single story for a month can kind of drain your energy. I need something new to have fun with, and I already have several other stories on the drawing board, but time will tell if they will get published or not. Anyway, I thank you guys for all the positive reactions toward the other chapters (and hopefully a few will like the ending here as well), and I hope to get other stories released as well. This will probably be my one and only story with mindcontrol/supernatural elements involved though. In any case, Thanks once again, and have a good day everyone ^^ |