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Comments from throatHER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2019-03-06 02:17:59 | Adventures of Sarah - Chapter 2 | This story needs work, primarily in the dialogue department. Tyshawn said. Jesse said. Tyshawn said. Jesse said. Poor dialogue can ruin a good story to which, I believe, you have. Tyshawn said. Jesse replied. Tyshawn responded. Jesse continued. Just some pointers. |
| 2019-03-08 04:11:08 | Sister in law Hot Tub | I like the theme of the story. A good sex tale. |
| 2019-03-10 12:15:01 | Adventures of Sarah - Chapter 3 | Much better writing than previous chapters. Keep up the good work. |
| 2019-03-11 20:42:34 | it finally happend | Very good story, but please work on your sentence and paragraph structure. These type of errors can ruin a good story. Nice work overall! |
| 2019-03-11 21:05:49 | it finally happend part 2 | Just like the previous chapter you have to work on the structure for your story to truly shine. Good story. |