| 2015-06-21 09:32:47 |
The Handyman Can !_(1)
|
Let the style, grow on you, be open to change and something that is different ..... |
| 2015-06-22 08:47:22 |
The Handyman Can !_(1)
|
Bad is good........ha ha |
| 2015-06-22 09:01:41 |
The Babysitter_(9)
|
Well written, I enjoyed it thoroughly, do you write male/female ? |
| 2015-06-22 09:11:29 |
my first time with my stepmom and aunt_(1)
|
Interesting.... do have some one proof read it, and do break it up into smaller paragraphs, much easier to read... lets see how the next one turns out..... |
| 2015-06-28 14:02:34 |
Crazy Night
|
No need to be nervous, good first attempt, good story line, a bit rushed, do try and space paragraphs more, easier to read, I'll give you a positive....have a read of mine...hope to read your next story... |