| 2018-08-10 01:14:08 |
A night with Nicole
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The sheeple don’t believe it possible because they’ve never experience anyone who had the will to take what they want. I have no idea of you are on the up and up, probably not. Your story is good but lacks the heat, the burning need that drives this kind of act. Nothing in the world comes close. But that’s fine. Let the kiddies scream and huff. Let them wonder if the world is truly safe or if monsters really do walk in the shadow. This was an exciting read either way |
| 2018-09-18 07:19:55 |
Isabella: Part 1: Mom
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Not bad. I gave you a positive rating but it felt very rushed. It would have been a lot better if you took your time. You do have a sadistic flare though |
| 2018-09-18 07:33:20 |
Predator Prey: The Revivification by Millie Dynamite
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Fascinating story. Brutal, unexpected and unashamed. |
| 2018-09-21 04:07:25 |
Last Gasp
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You have mastered the art. This is truly excellent. You captured victims fear and dispair as perfectly as you did the killers satisfaction with his work. |
| 2018-09-21 08:00:09 |
Girls Abducted - Steiner's Journey Part 1
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Well written. Your prose is very good, but if you are gonna wade into the deep end of rape and worse, take off the floaties and get wet in the warm depths of their fate. It’s like he took them, used them but never abused them. I find it out if caractir for the man you tried to write. It felt like your heart wasnt into is, son. Not voting negative, just a little disappointed in its lack of follow through |