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Comments from Raudhbjorn
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2020-09-15 03:59:07 | The sophomore and me, an older guy (CHapter 1) | Good setup, good de***********ion, good premise. You need to drop the ***********-style dialogue cues. |
| 2020-09-19 17:11:26 | The Way it is Now.CH7 | Ohh...this girl is gonna get Phillip arrested or shor or both. You write the innocent/whore character type very well. Phillip still seems a little bland; no distinguishing features other than not being a complete asshole. I really enjoy your work. Its a good balance between sex, internal monolog and backstory. The plot is intriguing and I can see some future strife already lined up. Interactions between Sara and Philip's parents should be interesting and I think Sarah's grandfather will like Phillip quite a lot. Please, keep writing and enjoy the characters as much as we do. |
| 2020-10-23 06:44:10 | Maria's Favor to a Geek - Chapter 10 | I'd like to see a Ted/Natalie story. She seems like too much fun to be stuck with an asshole like Ted. I wanna know how they got together and how he sorted his ahit out ao she'd stayvwith him, or not. |
| 2020-10-25 21:21:36 | Kidnapping And Raping | The extra scene fundamentally changes the story. Without it, its a brutal tale of dinance and submisssion take the the illogical extreme. With it, its just an NC fantasy, a story about consenting adults doing what they want. Ultimately its up to you. What sort of story fo you want to tell. |
| 2021-01-18 19:13:06 | Across Eternity: Book 1 - Chapter 5 | God damn ninjas in here cutting onions. Aww... fuckit. YOU KILLED TIN YOU BASTARD! |