| 2020-02-25 23:45:08 |
Extra lessons from Mrs Renauld’s
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great story. where is the rest of it? needs a bit more punctuation |
| 2020-04-07 15:54:45 |
Orc Guardians: Prologue
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not a bad beginning. more plz |
| 2020-06-21 16:28:36 |
Quintuplets sisters and a little Brother: the beginning
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who cares about how many black belts & sizes as it is just a story. a few errors: disinfect instead of disinfectant, 'are you attractive to me?' instead of 'are you attracted to me?' otherwise a good start to this story |
| 2020-08-09 18:53:02 |
Owning the girl next door
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read this nearly 2 yrs ago. very disappointed that nothing has been done to improve the flow of this story. a lot of the time, you are not sure who is speaking. this is still a good story but ruined by its faults |
| 2020-08-18 20:43:46 |
Harry Potter Adventures: Chapter 4 - Part 2 of 3 - Ron's Reward
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ditto to EdTheBeast |