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Comments from DudeInATurtleneck
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2020-06-04 04:22:14 | Las Vegas with the family | I’d echo other comments; good basic story, but get a proofreader, slow down the story to develop characters and describe the sex in more detail. To that I’d add diversify the names: I thought cousin Jessica deflowered in this story was the same as cousin Jessica deflowered in another one of your stories. |
| 2020-06-04 04:36:03 | Las Vegas with the family | ...and to the commenter/commenters who call people who dislike bad grammar “English Teachers”...just because you don’t understand why people an find bad grammar jarring and something that takes one out of the narrative doesn’t invalidate that opinion. If it doesn’t affect you, great...you will be able to more easily enjoy more stories. typically someone who takes the time to “put pen to paper” should be open to honest and analytical opinions on writing style - not the “YOU SUCK!” style of criticism, of course. |
| 2020-06-05 11:01:46 | Dee came to visit chapter1 | I like your stories and writing style but there is ONE thing that’s off-putting; trying to follow a multi-part story is a pain in the ass because of your titles; they aren’t easy to trace because you don’t tend to name things “blah part 1”, “blah part 2” etc. how about, at the start of a chapter of a multi-part story, you have a list of the previous parts, in order? |
| 2020-07-12 16:00:57 | I'm an Absolute Animal | Enjoyed this story lot...I’m assuming, from his demeanor, that Joe DID, in fact, hear, and knows what happened...more parts to th8s story would be appreciated, thanks. |
| 2020-07-16 22:03:47 | Surprise Internet hook-up | Liked it a lot...I guess, after six years, no chance of a second part? |