| 2020-10-04 05:09:31 |
My Daughters Best Friend
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First reading, I wasn't logged in, so comments were not posted. For next part, suggest Clari act like Sel to get Logan's cock in her. After they climax, Sel comes into the dark room like Clari & jumps on Logan. He rays,"I can't" & Clari responds, "But Daddy, you already have." Good job; don't stop! |
| 2020-10-04 05:58:54 |
My Daughters Best Friend 2
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I like yours better than mine. THANKS |
| 2020-10-17 02:07:17 |
Roommate Shift Ch3
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Yeah! Enjoyed the whole series. Good technical (spelling, grammar, paragraphs, dialogue), good scenario, when changing scenes or times, I suggest (------), or (*****) or something to indicate the change! For a few of us less educated followers, it's hard for us to shift gears without a clutch; we have to go back a paragraph to adjust to the new situation (breaks the easy flow of the story line). Just "later", "meanwhile", or "at Someone else's apt"; anything to make the change less abrupt |
| 2020-10-27 18:17:21 |
How Traditions Start – Part 16
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3rd or 4th time to read this, previous comment deleted. As long as you're writing, i'll be reading. Expecting #17 last few weeks. Looking forward to 3-4 more chapters; Lisa & Jack, Liz & Jack, Tom & Molly, then a naked "free-for all" down at the swim deck, all the guys do all the girls. I also like naughtydragon's ideas. Starry, you AWESOME, great scenario & character development, a few errors in #16, but overall, up to your high standards!! |
| 2020-10-30 04:28:08 |
DRIVING MISS DAISY--Part 5 of 5
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Fully enjoy all your stories, especially this series! You take as long as needed to complete the plot & "tie up all the loose ends"! So many authors seem to leave multiple questions unanswered with several posabilities to "tie up loose ends"! Here all questions about characters finality answered! THANKS for completing the series. Good work! |