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Comments from ejls
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2009-07-25 10:14:47 | Football Fantasy Part 1 | Bistander called it. Spacing would make this much easier to read. For a first attempt, I thought it was good. Reread what you've written and see what you can add to make the characters more real. Description is essential. |
| 2009-07-29 19:49:45 | Nora | I apologize for the spacing in this submission. I transferred between two different word programs, and did not know this error would occur. -ejls |
| 2009-08-04 22:47:21 | Still crying. Still wanting more. | |
| 2009-08-28 06:48:15 | Nora | For those who requested another chapter, I submitted it last night. I hope it will be validated by Sunday. I've never attempted a second chapter before. I hope you enjoy it as much as the first. |
| 2009-10-09 05:36:52 | The Restaurant_(1) | A beautifully written story about fantasies coming true for a couple in love. I look forward to more from you. |