| 2018-05-24 19:56:11 |
The Unspoken Game_(0)
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To me it was okay droned on for a while there. overall a good story but I believe the intensity between the brother and sister would have been far more enticing for the first chapter. |
| 2018-05-24 20:00:06 |
The Unspoken Game_(0)
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the second chapter would having the mothers acquiescence to her sons advances and her lust because of her husbands constant lack of attention. Then the third the father accidently finding his son's semen smeared inside of his wife's bra took matters into his own hands. He would take her prized possession his wife's daughter as punishment for her betrayal |
| 2018-05-31 20:59:09 |
Nubile Bliss 2
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There are some minor issues with the story but nothing that should keep it from being rated as high as it is. Some of the spelling and the storyline jumping back and forth just a little Must have been from a re-write. I like the age span very nice |
| 2018-05-31 20:59:14 |
Nubile Bliss 2
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There are some minor issues with the story but nothing that should keep it from being rated as high as it is. Some of the spelling and the storyline jumping back and forth just a little Must have been from a re-write. I like the age span very nice |
| 2018-05-31 20:59:14 |
Nubile Bliss 2
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There are some minor issues with the story but nothing that should keep it from being rated as high as it is. Some of the spelling and the storyline jumping back and forth just a little Must have been from a re-write. I like the age span very nice |