| 2018-05-31 21:13:57 |
Barnyard Antics
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Not a bad first story. I know there was a lot more you wanted to put in there. I can see where your ideas trailed off abruptly. Keep going don't stop writing |
| 2018-06-05 02:08:58 |
My Daughter's Friend Natalia Part # 9 & # 10
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I do like the story of both girls wanting to explore and explore on their own terms not allowing daddy to control them but they control daddy. I just wish that you would be consistent with your story. Natalia uses a dildo which means she would have broken her hymen. details it's all in the details |
| 2018-06-05 02:09:03 |
My Daughter's Friend Natalia Part # 9 & # 10
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I do like the story of both girls wanting to explore and explore on their own terms not allowing daddy to control them but they control daddy. I just wish that you would be consistent with your story. Natalia uses a dildo which means she would have broken her hymen. details it's all in the details |
| 2018-06-05 02:09:03 |
My Daughter's Friend Natalia Part # 9 & # 10
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I do like the story of both girls wanting to explore and explore on their own terms not allowing daddy to control them but they control daddy. I just wish that you would be consistent with your story. Natalia uses a dildo which means she would have broken her hymen. details it's all in the details |
| 2018-06-15 19:14:28 |
Missy, Brother and Dad (double incest)
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the daddy play with the robe was very nicely done. Very interesting concept wish you developed it just a little more. could've been way hotter. Perhaps a little longer details about the romps in the hay. Just a suggestion a 7/10 for me |