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Comments from hotjohn4321
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2013-04-25 11:33:47 | It Started At The Pool - Part 2 | good story, suggest you separate the dialog more to make is easier to read. |
| 2013-07-26 13:05:35 | Times in my Life: Part Two | Good story line. Waiting for chapter 3 |
| 2013-08-05 16:59:25 | Ralph and Sandy | Good start at writing. Try double spacing and separating the dialogue. Us quotation marks " " as it makes for better reading. Write you next chapter. OH do not let the grammar trolls discourage you, they don't me. Also, even though not perfect for spelling, use Word or similar program to write then copy and paste here. Waiting for chapter 2. |
| 2013-08-07 12:14:25 | I can change your mind_(1) | Good story but you need to space the lines better. To hard to read on screen. Double space and separate the dialogue. |
| 2013-08-15 22:16:16 | New Neighbors? Part 1 | good start great story idea. |