| 2011-08-02 19:09:10 |
Pizza with Jade
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Really good, I loved it. Though if I can give some constructive criticism, I thought that the transition between being outside and actually inside her was too short. For example, you say that he just forced his dick into her asshole and pussy, without any real buildup. You should have described pressing the head against the ring, pushing the head in, and the tightness as you forced it in all the way. You did the same thing with her pussy. Also, you should have had him lick her pussy between fondling her breasts and actually raping her. It's kind of gross to lick a girl's pussy after she's already been ejaculated into, and you didn't give enough detail. But all that aside, good story. |
| 2011-08-02 19:13:20 |
Airport_(1)
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It needed to be a lot longer, a LOT longer. There was no buildup. |
| 2011-08-02 21:21:08 |
Daughter's Friend
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This is officially my favorite story, seriously, this was breathtaking. I knew it was going to end in an orgy or at least a threeway, but after the first half, I couldn't imagine how you would keep me entertained until the second, but you did! That was one of the greatest stories I have ever read, I loved the sex, the story, and the comedy. It was the perfect blend and I would like to thank you for posting this online so that we could read it. Thank you, this was a fantastic story. |
| 2011-09-11 13:15:07 |
The Farm_(0)
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Pretty good, but what the hell is a dog's "knot"? |
| 2011-09-21 15:54:07 |
My Daughter's Slumber Party
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I hope everyone enjoys the story! |