| 2011-09-22 06:48:52 |
My Daughter's Slumber Party
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IF YOU DON'T LIKE IT THEN DON'T COMMENT! |
| 2011-09-24 17:01:52 |
Family of Whores
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It was ok, but it has a lot of room for improvement. It could use a lot more build-up with emotional development; Rebecca becoming horny for the dog so quickly could use more explanation, their youngest daughter suddenly willing to fuck her parents and her dog needs explanation, and the fact that the father is so willing to molest his daughter needs a lot of explanation. It was good, but it needed a lot more development for every character and there needed to be modesty during the sex. |
| 2011-09-24 20:17:09 |
Tiffany's Bad Night of Poker
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Very well written, though I'm not sure if I liked it or not. I was turned on at first, but halfway, I just started getting angrier and angrier. I must admit that I am filled more with the urge to kill than sexual arousal. But don't let me ruin your story, you are a great writer. |
| 2011-11-07 06:43:09 |
My Daughter's Slumber Party
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Thanks horny teenager, I really appreciate the support and voice of reason. |
| 2012-05-11 17:12:28 |
The Crabwalk
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Great story! The dialogue was a been corny, but it was sexy as hell. |