| 2012-04-07 09:35:24 |
Bitch for a Night
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Novel idea and good writing. Cheers! |
| 2012-04-07 09:38:35 |
My new slave_(0)
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Good story. Only try to split sentences and use commas wherever needed. And don't make one para chapters that makes no sense. |
| 2012-05-11 13:09:03 |
Wake up baby girl: Part two
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awesome story. keep up the good work. :) Pandorius999 |
| 2012-05-19 17:06:25 |
sis's milk
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The sequence seems a lil skewed. A tit fuck after a pussy fuck? Still overall pretty good. |
| 2012-05-19 17:18:35 |
Infiltrating the girl's school
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It's complicated for what reason I don't know. Apositive but barely. |