| 2013-04-01 15:44:25 |
Hot Hijabi Wife
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good writing mate. If Patel denotes what it should, then writing from the subcontinent and threabouts is improving. Cheers! |
| 2013-04-02 17:23:42 |
The princesses Shame
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Avoid large paragraphs. With the small font that this site has, reading is difficult. |
| 2013-04-08 11:17:04 |
mat Billy doctor and the dog
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Do you use autocorrect or translator ? Or is your native language something other than english ? There are too many errors of spelling to mention, and the sentence structures are weird. I'd suggest you use a reliable translator if you are using one. |
| 2013-07-22 15:56:22 |
My Ex, the Slave (Part 4)
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Great story keep up the good work! |
| 2013-07-22 15:58:49 |
sister bitch
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Not a bad story but spell check and a bit of commas semicolons etc would be great. :-) |