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Comments from truebutchanged
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2013-12-06 03:04:23 | Jenna Marbles | to the most recent posted: thanks for your support! if you'd be willing, i'd like for you to message me through this site. (if you have an account, it's rather easy. if not, getting one isn't any trouble at all) |
| 2015-01-04 07:38:29 | The Rules of Detention | outstanding! very well done. a few typos that if you continue, I would have checked, but other than that it was amazing |
| 2015-09-17 18:32:40 | Julie's Assault | there were a few instances where you went from 1st person to 3rd, or where the grammar just didn't quite match up. But i've went from a 1st person to a 3rd person, and sometimes you miss things. Its not like it ruined the story by any means. Try switching up your pronouns a bit. Starting 80% of the sentences out with "she" did get quite repetitive. But all in all good story man. thumbs up |