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Comments from Angry Ed
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| 2013-02-04 17:00:16 | ...ions and run off in a random direction. I really think that you are one of the most skilled Authors on this site. And, undeniably the most open to criticism. Thank you for your mention of me in your forward no matter unnecessary it was. And on to suggestions! (I do have another chapter to read tonight and I can't wait.) "Hi my name is..." NOOOOOO! When it was Likka I understood that she, the unflappable companion could write in Rhys' journal (Really?!! Didn't know this was a journal) the way she did. But, Morgana? No. 'Hi this is Morgana' should have been blotted out on the page with tears. Or, when someone else writes in it their text should be italicized or otherwise differentiated. Then, either signed at the end (great trick for confusing readers in a good way ;-) ) or let the reader know in some other way. "...I heard my name..." "Morgana's fingers and feet are turning flesh!" BTW I like the vocab you toss in there every now and then too. Opps out of space |
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| 2013-02-04 18:19:05 | And here I was telling you, or at least tring to explain what you could do to better your abilities to do so. And i forgot what this site was all about. And you brought the sex back. I don't think that I will comment any more for fear that the triple post will happen again or that my suggestions will affect the story. (I don't think they would. or at least I hope.) Great! That is all I can say. A minor error (we all make them I already see a few that I have made an this is shorter than your story) or two an that was it. I have to admit. This one had it all. Sex, love, blood, gore and I think I may have had to wipe a few tears from my eyes. I'll blame that on the beer. Feel free to PM me if you want any more help. I don't think you need it. |
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| 2013-02-07 17:35:13 | I'm actually biting my nails here man. Do I want more story? sex? tears? elaboration? Another cliffhanger? Okay to be honest, every chapter leaves me chomping at the bit like a cliffhanger. I know you wont disappoint. And, I would also like to know what happened with the "proofreader." (wink wink) |
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| 2013-02-08 19:56:26 | Wow. normally i'd post another long one but, i think every one else has already said what i wanted to say. I'll admit it. I'm drinking again so i never once saw any of these errors but i suck at spelling anyway. I think a Myka sequel. would be perfect. if you're up for writing in the female perspective. hell, maybe a story about Rhys while on our earth. I wonder what you could do with your characters if they didn't have magic. I check everyday for a new one. Just like the rest of your fans. Keep it up. |
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| 2013-04-11 16:57:42 | Returning Chapter 03 | send me a pm with where i can get it and i will buy it. then stalk you to find your address so i can send it to you for an autograph. ^_^ |