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Comments from sunshine233321
| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2014-09-23 06:47:46 | Truths and Betrayals of a Young Man's Heart Chapter 1 | Hawkrider, Please don't listen to the comments that said that you should not continue this story. You are a fantastic author and I am a huge fan of truth and betrayals of a Young Man Heat and I am pleading with you to please keep writing this wonderful story as soon as possible into a series or a long story. I have read chapter 1 multiple times that is how fantastic this story is. I have some suggestion for you can you please have Alex and Mina because boyfriend and girlfriend and can you please have them get married after high school and have a baby girl that Alex helps deliver the baby. Can you please have Alex meet her Parents and ask her father permission to marry her and can you please have Alex propose to her and of their wedding day and their honey moon. Thank you sunshine233321 |
| 2014-10-07 07:36:58 | Jay and Amy part 2 | You are an excellent writer and one of my favorite author, I really enjoyed this story. You have great character development I am pleading with you to please continue with this story as soon as possible.. the reason that the parent are upset with her is that Emily talk with Amy parents and told lies about Amy and Amy tell her parent that she did not do any of this but they did not believe her and also Emily to them that Amy was no longer a virgin when she was in fact a virgin. Amy parents does not let her prove any thing, they call her names and kicks her out of the house. Amy parents think that Amy took Jay way from Emily. Amy parents like Jay a lot Amy parents think that Amy slapped Emily and gave her a bruised cheek. Amy parents had already put her clothes in boxes and then her father carried it out side and put it in her car. Amy moves in to Jay house. Jay train Amy to be stronger and in mma. Amy parent find she did not lie Jay confront emily (more comment) |
| 2014-10-13 07:18:51 | The Love of a Cousin part 2 | ThePillar, You are a amazing author, and it one of the best story I ever read and I thoroughly enjoy reading these chapters. You have fantastic character development, and I am pleading with you to please continue with this story as soon as possible. I have some suggestions for chapter 3 , my first suggestion that I have is that you write from Lizzy mom point of view when she brought Lizzy backpack with her supplies for the weekend and she saw the truck. My second suggestion is on the way to the new state and city where they are going to live they stop at a gas station to get gas and get a lottery ticket and he let's Lizzy pick the numbers and they up winning the lottery. My third suggestion is that you write from the Lizzy mom point of view when she realizes that her daughter and her daughter cousin ran away. My fourth suggestion is that the Lizzy cousin father and sister and Aunt all know Ray and they send the sister to where Ray lives to find out what happen to Lizzy and her cousin |
| 2014-07-23 07:27:36 | Kendall Jenner (Part 1) | I have read your story and I got to say that is the best I every read. I have some suggestions for you for Chapter 2 Kendall See the Car Hit Jon Car please can you not make Jon hurt to bad and can you have Kendall want to take care of Jon until he get better and can you have Jon get fired from his job because he left the store and Kim forgot to tell the manager and also because he was hurt and could not come into work and they would not hire him back and Can you have one of her friends or somebody make fun of Kendall for dating Jon because he is not a celebrity but she dates Jon any way. Kendall meet Jon family and has dinner over there and Jon meet her mother. Kendall has Jon Sleepover and after dating he decide to ask Bruce for permission to marry his daughter and then she get pregnant with a baby girl. Please continue with the story and Please do not get discourage by any bad comments that you may receive as you are a great author. |
| 2014-08-27 07:38:17 | My neighbor, Mrs. West's daughter (part one) | Can you please keep the story a more about Julie and less about the mother and can you please have Jackson a Julie get married and have a get pregant. |