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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2018-03-26 08:40:12 | My niece, the boarder | "My Niece, The Boarder" - Early Forties Year Old (Unmarried?) Uncle, William (Bill) and Early Twenties Year Old Married Niece, Amy and Her Good-for-nothing Husband, Buster. The story needs some major work, such as an introduction of the scene, situation, character traits, ages, details, backgrounds. The story is rushed, there is no--NONE--foreplay (he hasn't seen his niece in years) and we are to believe she is a kind, sweet mother family member and the daughter of Bill's sister, Beverly. Bill has a good life, a big home and a niece that needs rescuing from her bastard husband. Amy is the mother of Bill's baby (daughter or son?), needs a caring, thoughtful, gentle soul to care for her and uncle's child. Bill needs to help her to get divorced, bring her and baby home to his love and more babies! The story is too short due to lack of details, NO foreplay and rushed sex! Give us a Part Two, an improved format and a loving couple! |
| 2018-05-08 01:03:31 | Cherry(chapter 1) | "Cherry (Chapter 1)" - Mid-twenties Year Old, David "Lucky" Mann and Nineteen Year Old Virgin, Cherry. |
| 2018-05-08 01:18:53 | Cherry(chapter 1) | "Cherry (Chapter 1)" - Mid-twenties Year Old, David "Lucky" Mann and Nineteen Year Old Virgin, Cherry. Accidentally hit "Enter" key before completing comments, several minutes ago. I'm off to read "Cherry (Chapter 2)" shortly. Although I did read this first chapter about seven (7) months ago, I do have a slight difference of the writing style now. Although the story context, byline, plot and theme is still very good , I did have to refresh and update the story theme in my recall of events. The difference I garnered this time is there is too much effort in some of the small things that have little meaning to the story context, such as an almost minute-by-minute deion of the "oven on fire" call-out could have been condensed to something less than submitted. Again, the story is great,,..young love on the vine, figuratively. Cherry was a little brazen with her initial offer to give David a blowjob--but was well detailed. |
| 2018-05-14 03:51:37 | My Sister, My Lover_(1) | "My Sister, My Lover - Part 1" - Nineteen Year Old (Step ?) Brother, Patrick and Seventeen Year Old Virgin (Step ?) Sister, Amy. In the bottom left corner, at the end of this Part 1 is an indication of "PART 2 - After Our Nap"!! Two things seem crystal clear: 1) The ending of Part 1 indicates there is more to this story, and a Part 2 is most probable; and 2) The notation at the end, bottom left, pretty much "says" a Part 2 is probable!! AND yet, there IS NO PART 2!! Bah, Humbug!! This story is about separated (step) brother and (step) sister, due to their parents divorce, through their young preteen years into late teenage years! Never spending time at all together, they finally meet when brother Patrick becomes of age at nineteen (19) years old, and goes to visit his (step) sister. It's instant love, at first sight. If 'Daddy Warbuck' is reading these comments...give us Part 2 of a great story of sibling teen love!! |
| 2018-05-18 07:07:57 | A Lifelong Affair pt. 2 | "A Lifelong Affair - Part 2" - Twenty-one Year Old Brother, Kevin and Twenty Year Old Sister, Lilly. The original Part 1, when Kevin was twelve year old and sister Lilly was eleven years old, has been deleted. This story is still as great as the original. There is maturity (both sibling's now having other non-related friends with sex benefits) in their lives and the sexual maturity of these now young adolescent lovers. The writer, 'str8tohell', has produced a superb literary, incestuous masterpiece of brother and sister love!! Neither has yet admitted to their "in-love" with the other, but the under currents are there for their deep-seeded love to be nurtured, molded and blended into an everlasting, epic bonding of true man and woman love and desires!! The writer 'str8tohell' has a mastery of words that are deive beyond belief. Any reader that cannot feel, and visualize, these sibling lovers will never know what they're missing!! |