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Comments from icefrodo
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2014-06-17 18:06:11 | Time Stop_(0) | I'm not a native speaker, so I'm sure there's some grammatical errors. Please do point them out, so that I could improve! :) |
| 2014-06-12 18:19:58 | Childhood Friends_(0) | Thanks for pointing out the typo! It's been spell checked several times, but there's always one that misses the eye :S |
| 2014-08-24 16:05:49 | The Dragon's Treasure, Part I | A fantastic piece of erotic literature! I've been looking for something in the sword-and-magic compartment... |
| 2014-06-12 12:44:58 | Childhood Friends_(0) | Thank you for the feedback, Mr. Anonymous Reader! The ending is indeed short, but I prefer to have it that way. I tried to build the story here so, that there's a build-up and a climax, and a quick closure, kind of like I'm only telling the first chapter in a story that every reader can continue in their head if they so wish. I like an abrupt closure after the climax, as that will leave the reader at the peak of his/her excitement, wondering and imagining what would happen next. It works for me, at least :) |
| 2015-08-01 14:06:12 | The Young Wizard--Part 1 | The only problem I see here is how the sexual stuff kind of starts out of nowhere. Also, the first paragraph of the 2nd chapter really could use some formatting :D Otherwise I really liked this one. It's sweet and simple. Few writers describe the sexual acts as believably and descriptively as you do here :) Also, luckily no one can stop my imagination, and I imagined the characters a few years younger, just like you had probably originally intended! |