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Comments from pyroclast
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2015-09-24 06:15:10 | the Girl 3 | You have problems with verbs, especially past tense verbs. "Hided" uggggh! "Lied" ugggh! Also wrong spelling for same sounding words "where" instead of "wear". You MUST proof-read. |
| 2015-09-27 12:25:02 | The Stranger_(2) | Pathetic drivel, fuck! Fuck! Fuck! Fuck! Fuck! Fuck! That's all it is, constant boring FUCK. |
| 2015-10-02 08:45:49 | Lap Dance | Beautiful! That was my first reaction as I voted. Lovely buildup in the story line, undulating like the lapdancer. And the end? Delicious and abrupt. Write more of these moments in life, they are wonderful. |
| 2015-10-02 09:06:03 | Story Writer | Yes, wordy and descriptive, but not forensic analysis of sexual union, stroke by stroke, as the psychos want. This is a good story that built in intensity as it progressed, and flowed to a foregone conclusion. |
| 2015-10-01 13:52:26 | My Mother's Lover | Great story; yes could well be extended to another chapter, or even more. But why do some comments want women to get pregnant? Seems a sort of psycho hangup to me. Yeah, I suppose with such a high mental illness rate in the states, psycho attitudes will flourish. |