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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2017-09-15 05:09:17 | Lost Empire 50 | "Both men smirked as did Derrick, they had never had any mission that was simple." Summary of the chapter, right there. So we get a single line of dialogue that tells us ago much information. " Walking up to Randall the man placed a hand on Randall's chest then smiled. "Good! That's the second of the ten. Call disposal!"" The SECOND of the TEN. If we go in order of original deaths, Daniel was the 1st, and Randall would have been 2/10. But if on the other ships we've got Derrick, Dempsy, Rayburn, and Kimison, that only makes 6/10. Add in the last 2 deaths, Shilo and Grant, that's still only 8/10. Where are the last 2? Wait! Way back when... When Derick was in war flashback mouse, a member of the squad died in the battlefield - the son of the crazy martial arts bitch! So there's 9, sorta. (because the guy said there were 10 people to kill, and Randall was only the second) (idfk) but that still leaves one more spot to fill. Pars, am I missing info, or is it a continuity error? |
| 2017-09-15 05:14:19 | "The day our family's Rottweiler took me" | So, what's with you going around and downvoting other authors' - more popular authors' works? You just trying to be a bitch and lower everyone elses rating so yours is on top? That shit won't work. ToucanPlay tried and LOST that game, and so will you. |
| 2017-09-15 05:19:00 | "My wedding day" | So, what's with you going around and downvoting other authors' - more popular authors' works? You just trying to be a bitch and lower everyone elses rating so yours is on top? That shit won't work. ToucanPlay tried and LOST that game, and so will you. I'm not being a troll, either. Your story was well written, it had it's flaws here and there, as every story does. It was fairly entertaining , too. But watch it, you may find thyself pissing off the wrong fans. |
| 2017-09-15 20:43:03 | Lost Empire 50 | Thank you Pars |
| 2017-10-04 21:42:25 | Amy, Are you OK_(0) | Thank you MissRachael for sharing the story with others. Loved it in every way. |