| 2019-11-29 04:25:22 |
Eve and James, a loving relationship
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Not a true story as billed. Maybe based on one, but it sounds like a fantasy to me. |
| 2020-03-17 09:20:08 |
University Gangbang Aged 19 (Part 1)
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I don't believe that this is a true story. |
| 2020-04-02 12:45:56 |
Potential Part 30_(1)
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As usual, one of my favorites. I'm learning a lot about writing from you. |
| 2020-07-14 12:39:24 |
Incestuous Tales of the Quarantine 1: Quarantined with His Nubile Daughter
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18? No. She acts like 14, and he thinks of her that way, too. Either make the character consistent with the age or the age consistent with the character. |
| 2020-11-22 08:29:25 |
Quarantined with Mom and My Sisters Chapter 1: My Loving Mother's Naughty Relief
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I enjoyed the story a lot except for a couple of things. The ages don't seem realistic to me. I suspect you altered them so that all the kids would be 18 and over. All 3 of them seemed younger to me than stated. Also I kept expecting one or both of the girls to hear what was going on. We'll see what happens in the next episode. |