| 2020-01-08 02:13:13 |
Team Players (Part 3)
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Here we go again! No Pt 4 to finish out the foursome , then add Mandy & Jim to make it ;6 Also wanted to see the threesome with Dan, Matt & Jac. Expectf a DP & Split-roast. Would Amy watch? Ur stories & intimate details are AWESOME! THANK YOU, again, for sharing Ur life activities & fantastic fiction. |
| 2020-01-17 02:27:27 |
Grandma's Secret
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Fantastic, AWESOME, I think I have read one of Ur stories Eagle, but this is one of the best I've read. "Family Traditions" by Starrynight is another excellent story of a caring & loving family. The back & forth. between the diary & to date life was done very well. Technically, very few errors & hardly noticable. Professionally done as a readable story. MAkes me waaht to read more of your works. THANKS for sharing Ur talent with us. |
| 2020-01-18 05:36:13 |
Mom's Motivational Techniques
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nusual but delightful. Being told from the mother's perspective was the best way to present this situation. AWESOME! Like other stories of Urs I've read,good grammar, excellent plot & exciting intimate details.. THANK YOU again for sharing Ur fabilious talent with us |
| 2020-01-18 12:58:45 |
Mom makes a deal part 2
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Good series. Neeed to shoren paragraphs for reader's ease. Especially dialogue.with " " quotation marks. Half blind old menlike me sometimes read the same line or sentence time over time. that causes me to looke the flow of the story. My problem U could help solve. Thanks for sharing Ur talent.. |
| 2020-01-19 03:27:53 |
Saving mommy's marriage
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In some ways about what I expected, especially when Margret (Mpm) said "Dad & I have s special-" Amy cut her off. Also Mom's lack of surprise that Alice was as willing as she was & saying,"Your Mom wanted me to teach you something."Excelllent hints as to future. events. Very good writing; good plot, grammar,spelling, & intimate details (squirt by squirt (blow by blow). |