| 2021-01-20 04:15:46 |
Sibling Sex
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Changing voice/person as you have, is not easy & confusing. The scenario & details of action are great. Some paragraphs a little lông; some dialogue not clearly marked! Spelling & grammar, nothing glared as wrong. The main problem is the "person" speaking or telling the story. THANKS for posting on this site. |
| 2021-03-22 02:26:58 |
Taking revenge with my step son
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Lovely. Quick & to the point. Want to read more of your posts. |
| 2021-03-06 19:40:30 |
My Swinging Parents Part 7
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THANKS for continuing the series. Enjoyed all that I've read that you've posted. Good work! |
| 2021-03-06 21:02:19 |
Tomboy - 1
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How's pt 2 cumming now? |
| 2021-01-20 22:52:06 |
my best friend my sister
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Enjoyed. Good technical; good scenario, fairly good dialogue & paragraphs. THANKS for posting on this site! |