| 2020-01-18 02:00:21 |
Deadly Sex Games CH 1_(1)
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The build up and de***********ion was much too short. Kind of a premature ejaculation so to speak! |
| 2020-01-18 02:48:58 |
Donna and Megan prelude
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Good start! This could be a great series with lots of potential. I hope you continue. One suggestion: take your time to develop the characters and scenes and be de***********ive |
| 2020-01-18 02:51:57 |
it started with my mom_(1)
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Too many ellipses (...)! This made the story too difficult to read, so I didn't. |
| 2020-01-18 03:03:24 |
Goodnight Daddy Part 3
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It's a good story! I suggest you find someone to edit your stories; the spelling, word use, and grammar would then be correct, making it much more fun to read |
| 2020-01-18 03:26:05 |
Truth or Dare: Neighbors edition
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Guess I'm not into scatology. |