| 2020-02-05 01:52:24 |
SINFUL Gilmore - Alexis Bledel
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Fan fiction doesn't hold my interest for long unfortunately. You also might soon be mistaken for another author who is very fond of this style. My suggestion is to branch out more and please, skip the ellipses (...)!!! |
| 2020-02-05 02:24:43 |
Payback is a Dick
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Lots of spelling errors but it's a great concept. Take your time with your writing and it'll be more enjoyable. |
| 2020-02-07 04:21:05 |
Nurse Mom - Chapter 3 - Mom makes her move_(0)
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Calling a pussy/cunt a "kitten" is absolutely childish and laughable! I'm surprised you don't call a cock a "puppy" or something equally ludicrous. |
| 2020-02-14 03:31:22 |
Brother's Mind-Controlled Sisters 1: Brother's Cherry Surprise
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As always a fabulous story. One correction: a woman's hymen almost never covers the opening to her vagina. It simply rims it. You can trust me; I'm a nurse. |
| 2020-02-18 02:33:07 |
Answers for Michael 01
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I'd enjoy another chapter; thankfully, this is fiction as Michael definitely fits the de***********ion of a sociopath. |