| 2020-10-02 01:22:26 |
Mom/ Submissive
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Just not well written. No dialogue, poor punctuation. |
| 2020-10-02 01:22:28 |
Mom/ Submissive
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Just not well written. No dialogue, poor punctuation. |
| 2020-10-09 02:48:36 |
The World of Erasthay - The Son of Lust Chapter 6: Breeding His Mermaid Sisters
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You used to have a plot to your stories which made them great reading as well as incredibly erotic. However, this story lacks any shred of plot, character development, or even follow-up to the part preceding it. I'm disappointed. |
| 2020-10-27 03:04:29 |
New Beginnings CH03 The Weekend (Penetration Time)
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Please break up these huge blocks of text into paragraphs! So much easier to read. Otherwise, this is a great story. |
| 2020-11-24 02:24:36 |
My Awakeining_(0)
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I couldn't finish this possibly hot story; the lack of punctuation made it hard to read. Punctuation is a nuisance but makes a big difference in the reader's enjoyment. |