| 2018-11-29 02:33:32 |
Mom banged hard by tribal man in woods
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Almost unreadable. Spelling errors, sentence errors, paragraphs way too long, wrong verb tense. I suggest someone proof read your next story to help things get a little better. |
| 2018-11-29 20:33:14 |
The Chair_(4)
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Thank you for your kind words. |
| 2018-11-29 20:51:34 |
An Allegory, Moki and Susan
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Clearly, you wrote above most peoples heads. First several paragraphs were a tough read. Lots of terminology that many wouldn't understand or would have to Google to understand. The work is good. I hate to suggest this, but you may need to 'dumb it down' a bit if you keep this kind of writing up. However that's just an opinion. |
| 2018-11-30 06:29:09 |
Daddy's Little Bitch Part 3 Daddy's Friends
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It's good writing. There's not a discernible difference between what is from your life and what is fantasy. Hopefully, chapter 4 is in the works. Keep up the good writing. |
| 2018-12-02 21:18:35 |
Visiting My Cousins
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You write wonderfully. Nice story, be it true or true+a bit of fiction, it really doesn't matter. Keep writing! |