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Comments from Tash88
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2018-02-15 20:44:35 | Confession of a Serial Killer. | Very impressive. I have always spoken of 'the beast' rather than 'the monster', but the essence remains the same. There are few who are so open about their nature. Alice got lost in the rabbit hole. And in truth, it's the predator that makes the most wonderful prey. Continue writing. ~ Tash |
| 2018-02-16 14:27:49 | RAPED ON THE WAY TO WORK | And I applaud you for it. It's a very interesting (and erotic) thought. It also makes one wonder about the 'bystander' effect. Perhaps you can do a rewrite (I have rewritten some of my stories after constructive criticism) sometime where you can shed some extra light on this. It would certainly kill off the 'main' point of criticism. Glad to see you take your writing as serious as some others do. It is an art, after all. |
| 2018-04-06 12:58:23 | Suffocating Summer_(0) | I agree with the previous comment in every way. More so, I loved the psychological aspect of it; to read the struggle and confusion of a loving father versus the red-blooded male who needs to breed. You created a situation where those two opposite natures were at absolute extremes. Your writing towards the ending was captivating, normally the repetition of certain words and sentences bothers me, but in this case it made me experience the father's despair and longing even better. Thank you for this wonderful piece! |
| 2018-04-06 13:12:46 | RavagedMe | A bit fast on the writing (spelling, grammar etc) but the content made up for that. I applaud you taking your time setting up a background story, characters, building up anticipation etc. Looking forward to continue my read. |
| 2018-04-09 06:29:56 | RavagedMe Part Six | I really enjoyed the series. The splitting up of the chapters (even though they were short) added to the anticipation. You really went all out on her. I was surprised, pleasantly, that you ended on a more serious note by confirming that rape is a crime. Even if it turns our depraved minds on like no tomorrow... For constructive criticism I would advise you to pay more attention -structurally- to your writing in terms of punctuation, quotation marks, grammar etc. Fancy it up a bit. Because the story itself is great! Thank you for the pleasurable read and keep writing. |