| 2010-08-24 09:42:38 |
A Road Trip with My Grand Daughter-Part II
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Great second chapter, good plot and story line. Loved the time you took to describe and develop the plot of this chapter. My only concern is with some of the spelling and grammar. I am looking forward to reading the next 2 chapters. Thanks. |
| 2010-08-24 09:55:59 |
A Road Trip with My Grand Daughter-Part III
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Great third chapter, looking forward to chapter 4. Work on spelling, grammar, and punctuation. Try using a spell/grammar checker. Outside that, the plot and development of the plot is awesome. You don't jump into the sex too fast, you bring us along quite nicely. |
| 2010-08-24 11:26:59 |
A Roed Trip with My Grand Daughter-Part IV
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This series is excellent and I am waiting for the next chapter. You're doing good, but you need to work on spelling and grammar and punctuation. I know I seem to be hammering that, but it is important. The story, the plot, and the overall development is great - keep up the good work. |
| 2010-08-26 07:25:20 |
Family Only Part 3. Beth's pre night incestation.
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It is a bit strange, snippets here, snippets there. The writing is not what I would expect, nor should it be in the Joke category. Unless that was your sole purpose. BTW, you really shouldn't vote for your own work, a little narcissistic, don't you think? |
| 2010-08-26 07:47:45 |
A Road Trip with My Grand Daughter-Final Part
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I loved the series and the development of the whole plot throughout. Well done. Thanks for your time and your effort. |