| 2013-02-24 01:44:18 |
The Yellow Bone Chick
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I suggest you pay close attention in English class for the next several years before writing any more stories. I could only get past the first few lines before passsing on this wall of poorly constructed words. |
| 2013-02-26 12:48:48 |
Little Princess Ashley
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You may have a good story here, but I couldn't get past the first few lines. Please rewrite it and use line and paragraph breaks. Use double space between lines and double lines between paragraphs. Did you ever proofread this just once? |
| 2013-03-02 18:04:04 |
Daniels Revenge Part 2
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Great story. I hope it doesn't end here. Karen should be be subjected to so much more. |
| 2013-03-02 17:52:07 |
Daniels Revenge Part 1
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Looking forward to the next installment. |
| 2013-03-13 23:33:25 |
The Neighbors Daughter_(1)
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Proof reading is a good tool as well. |