| 2014-10-22 16:06:05 |
I'm Finally home!
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I look forward to reading part two. My only suggestion would be for you to proof read your work. There are just a few errors, mostly failures to insert spaces between words. Most likely spell check would catch them. Over all, I enjoyed your first porn effort. Please hurry with part two. |
| 2014-10-22 16:43:40 |
Desire, lust and Pleasure - A families desire.
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The brother sucking Dad's cock turned me off. |
| 2012-10-30 08:06:12 |
Friends with benefits- The girl next door.
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Nice story. I have just one criticism. Please double line space between paragraphs. That will break up what is commonly known as 'a wall of words' which is difficult to read. |
| 2012-10-31 12:45:06 |
Fucking his little sister and her friends
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Good story. I hope there is a part 2. |
| 2012-10-31 13:15:29 |
The Pregnant Married Whore Next Door
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That was a little different. It could have used a bit more detail. |