| 2014-12-24 16:23:11 |
Teaching a manipulative bitch a lesson
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This is a hot little story with a touch of realism. I hope you continue the series. |
| 2014-08-20 01:26:44 |
He took me #2
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Yeah your a sick fucker, but you have a vivid imagination that I enjoy. |
| 2012-04-02 14:43:16 |
Jail Bait
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Except for the texting codes, I liked your story. Far too many critics act like these stories are up for some kind of writing award. Just write what you like and let the critics go to hell. I look forward to the next installment to your story. |
| 2012-04-08 19:00:57 |
My Brother and Me_(7)
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I strongly suggest you try three things. One, use spell check. Two, get some real experience so your writing is closer to reality. Finally, pay attention in middle school and high school English. You really need all three of the above to improve this promissing story. |
| 2012-04-16 08:03:06 |
Forbidden Fruit_(5)
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You have a nice story. However, double spacing between paragraphs would have made it much easier to read. |