| 2012-11-01 13:24:26 |
The day it happend
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All of the below comments are accurate. I too suggest you take th etime to learn the proper use of the English language and seriously consider paying attention in elementary school writing class. You really need to learn about sentence structure and paragraphing. Then double space between paragraphs. Other wise, your story stll sucks. |
| 2012-11-07 08:01:13 |
Damn My Sons Cock Is Huge; Part Four
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I have never understood why some critics find it necessary to berate someone's story. Constructive criticism in encouraged, but if you really don't like a story, give it a negative vote and move on. I think this series is a good one, and I look forward to the next installment. Perhaps the sons could satisfy each other's Mom and sister. Just a thought. |
| 2012-11-08 08:22:01 |
I have you impregnate her
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NOw that she's knocked up, a next part could cover her swelling belly. Maybe Jack returns to take you ass. |
| 2012-11-08 08:42:36 |
OPEN WINDOW_(1)
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Not a bad story line, but you need to have it proof read. You have far too many sentence structure and grammatical errors. Next time please double line space between paragraphs. |
| 2012-11-22 15:29:54 |
Sweet Little Sister - Part 3
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I anxiously await chapter 4. Carol has to have time to practice deep throat and maybe take it in her virgin ass. You have an excellent story going. Keep it up. |