| 2010-08-25 02:15:34 |
Girls night out gone wrong! Part 2
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It was a nice story. I hope there is more. What happens when she finally gets home filled with cum? What about the other girls? I look forward to the follow-up. |
| 2010-08-27 03:45:34 |
Good little girl
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I certainly hope there is a part II. However, I too wish you would break your story into paragraphs. Try double spacing between them and they should be separated when you stories are published. |
| 2010-08-27 21:14:52 |
The neighbor's daughter
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Isn't it amazing how an anonyous critic can bad-mouth a work of fantasy. I always wodner how many of those critics have ever written anything. I liked your story and look forward to part 2. |
| 2010-08-30 04:06:12 |
Raping a cheerleader slut
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Isn't it amazing how many readers don't understand the term "fiction?" |
| 2010-09-29 03:33:52 |
Megans night
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I had to stop reading this. Have you ever heard of a paragraph? How about punctuation. Almost all writing xt programs have a spell check included. Next time, please try to pretend you paid a modicum of attention in high school English class. |