| 2011-03-06 16:47:10 |
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Sorry onehand. I gave this story a positive rating because the basic story idea is not explored very often and appeals to me, BUT, too short, not enough character development and not enough description of the sex. Superficial (although that may be a generation gap thing ie you're in twenties and I'm in my sixties) If this is your first effort I'd love to follow your development as a writer. |
| 2011-04-06 18:58:16 |
Emily's Turn: C02
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I know this story is disgusting and wrong on so many levels, and I doubt I could do it to my daughter, even if she wasn't already grown up' BUT it is so fucking erotic. Kids can be such conniving, determined little beggars when they decide they want something, and men are so sex mad. 8/10 |
| 2011-03-13 06:19:52 |
My younger Cousin Amanada
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Story may be has potential but spoiled by shit spelling, lousy grammar and crap use of text abbreviations and no layout (ie paragraphing). |
| 2011-03-13 06:31:13 |
Callie's Milk
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Obviously a couple of fuckheads here who can't read the word "Fantasy" at the top of the page. . .Good story well written. Part 2 would be welcomed. |
| 2011-03-13 07:04:53 |
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Great story, well written, Loved it |