| 2011-04-04 02:32:06 |
Emily's Lesson
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This is a great story, well written, well laid out and beautifully descriptive. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-04 02:39:08 |
The new neighbors_(2)
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Sequel please. Very erotic. Well worth reading. 8/10 |
| 2011-04-05 19:48:33 |
A Rainy Day_(1)
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Rebel, Overall you did very well for a first story, so positive vote. Spacing and readability was not perfect but not bad. More paragraphing, I only picked up on the one spelling error ( hymen) and one minor distraction. (Raging hard on is the same as raging hard on - so the capital letter wasn't required in the middle of a sentence). OVERALL : Loved the story and as a writer of short erotic stories, you have potential. I want to see more. Preferably a sequel to this with Blake and Chyanne. |
| 2011-04-05 20:01:14 |
Virgin Sacrifice_(1)
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Good writing. Don't we all want to go that way. Shagged to death so that we pass over in absolute bliss. Now where do I find the female version of Sh'daq who takes plain old men and screws them to death ??? 8/10 |
| 2011-04-06 06:32:52 |
The Rape of Mary
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Strange but very GOOD. 8/10 |