| 2015-05-10 21:17:59 |
The Hardship of a Large Chest
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It's decent enough... However I feel that there is really no point in the story. It reads just like one long complaint that is being emailed to someone for whatever reason, and the resolution doesn't help it look like anything else either. It makes it look like a response to the complaint is waiting to be sent. |
| 2015-05-24 19:32:56 |
Strange noises_(0)
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If this is, indeed, a stolen story, then you are stupider than I thought. Not even smart enough to steal a story worth reading, it's just plain awful. |
| 2015-06-20 16:31:38 |
(American dad parody) fucking mom and Haley
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This is terrible. No quotation marks, no real build up, terribly short. Yet somehow you did a better job than the script writers of the actual American Dad porn parody. |
| 2016-01-12 17:10:14 |
3 evil sisters part 9 new
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Too short, and I really doubt this would be the ideal version, because it isn't what SomeStory had planned, probably. |
| 2016-01-21 14:20:27 |
My Mothers Visiters, PART 2
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You probably need a proof reader. Some words may not be misspelled, but the occasional word is missing a letter and thus turns it into a completely different word. "tuned" instead of "turned" etc. And also you don't seem to use apostrophe s for possessive when talking about the man. Saying "mans cock" instead of "man's cock." Other than that, it's pretty good. |