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Comments from Preverted1
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2011-05-25 17:50:00 | My Sister Sarah and I | Thanks to all of you for the encouragement! Part 2 should be up in a day or two. I'll tease you now - there's potential for a Part 3! Need your feedback to make it work, though . . . |
| 2011-06-14 01:43:36 | Turbulence | That definitely qualifies as "Erotica"! Well-written and a pleasant change from the usual "pecker in pussy" prsentations. I love your style. |
| 2011-06-14 02:15:04 | Even in The Best Families | As pornography, this doesn't quite make it; as Erotica, it's a good presentation. Like some of your other stories that I've read, the style is, to me, very enjoyable. Sexuality is presented convincingly without a lot of nuts-and-bolts (and somewhat unnecessary) description. |
| 2011-06-21 02:16:49 | It feels so right. | Nicely written! I could grouse about proofreading and spell-check, but why bother? You've described your characters well, but more importantly, they interact in a very plausible way. That's rare, and a nice change. from the mainstream. I hope you have the courage to continue writing. You have a gift . . . . |
| 2011-06-21 02:33:57 | James' Family Awakening | A good first attempt. Some of your opening precepts are a little iffy, but the rest of the story has a flow to it that overcomes that weakness. The only way to overcome any deficiencies is to practise, practise, practise! That, and posting for feedback. Keep writing, as you have a developing talent for the craft! |