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Comments from darthel0101
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2014-05-01 22:50:30 | Boy in the grass 50 | I'll give it a positive vote but you had better complete the interrogation soon. - - - grrrrrrrr |
| 2013-06-30 13:54:54 | Mary's Unexpected Journey | A well told tale about a well told tail having a well tolled time with a well heeled hole |
| 2013-07-01 18:07:21 | Twin Japanese Nieces Pt29_(0) | Thank you for seeing this story through to its end; they are no longer your nieces but your daughters. May you find strength and the ability to grow through the telling of Kayko's story instead of only pain at the memories of what is no longer possible. Fair Winds and Following Seas |
| 2013-07-03 14:34:21 | Summer Vacation part 6 | RE the three negs: - 1 - calling Loretta, "mom" - - non-issue. If mom has earned that name by the end of the 'vacation' then he will likely be back for another visit. If mom has NOT earned that name then he will not. - 2 - Abby -vs.- Carlos - - it is called taking a bullet. it defines Abby, not Guy - 3 - Spanish narrative - - spot on. There are too many people who cannot speak the language to allow important portions of dialogue to be hidden in code. If the Spanish is needed for the story, put a parenthetical translation in so that the reader can understand what is said. Other than that, I see a well thought out story evolving and want to see it brought to the author's conclusion. I would also like to see a sequel as well but like they say about wishes and horses … |
| 2013-07-04 19:34:58 | My little sister and me and the girl that didn't exist | too many unresolved issues and too many questions for this to be even a chapter I hope there is some resolution in the future, soon |